Media's footy write up efforts?

Someone posted something in Generals about the writing I've been bragging about, so I'll post one here.
Feel free to bag me out, give advice, or anything else...
Tigers win thriller
Written by James Gloyn
With Tasmans boasting a who’s who of outs, a few pundits thought an upset may have been on the cards, and the outcome was one of the closest games in recent times, with the Tigers winning by just three points. One could have been forgiven for thinking it was the Masters Games, with Tasmans stalwart David Stoeckel, and Boston veteran Brett Watherston lining up for their respective sides.
In-form Tasman midfielder Pat Brown lined up on Bostons Stephen Rees early and this was a very good duel throughout the day, whilst playmaker Matt Dodd began the match loose on the half back line.
Rhys Marsh got the Tigers moving forward early, however points were the early flavour of the day, and instead of being three goals up early, the Tigers had just three behinds. Dale Gericke and Michael Tabe continued their form from the previous week, finding plenty of the ball, whilst Dodd and Scott Forrest controlled the Tasman half back line with a lot of contested ball.
The revamped Tasman defence, which at times included regular forward Brad Cimarosti, was under siege early in the second term, although goals were at a premium, with Adam Hywood snapping a classy goal under pressure; however Andrew Frick got an immediate reply, a rare highlight in his duel with Tabe.
Steven Craige, in his second game of the day, was put onto Paul Franklin, who had begun impressively, and did a fair job of shutting him down, and Tasmans Sean Emery, in his second League game of the season, did enough to show that he will be a future talent for the Roosters.
Towards the end of the second term, David Stoeckel joined the fray, going into the ruck, and turning back the clock, and not looking out of place at all.
Pat Brown began the third term with plenty of disposal, and one would have thought that he was winning the duel with Rees, despite the latter kicking a vital goal after earning a free kick. Jayden Roderick proved again he is the Tigers “Premiership quarter player,” after continuing the goal scoring after busting through the pack, and getting possessions at will. Ky Miller then kicked his first and only goal after a good passage of play involving Rees and Marsh, and it was the Tigers last score of the match.
Tasmans got an early goal through Cimarosti; his second of the day, but the tight contested play meant that this goal was the last of the day, although the impressive Emery had a difficult shot on goal late, which could have won the match for the Roosters. Late in the term Raikiwasa began to find the ball, but it was too little, too late for the Roosters, as Brett Watherston marked just before the siren, and the match finished with the ball in his hands, with the resultant after the siren kick well and truly off-line, giving the Tigers their second win of the season.
The under-manned Roosters were well served by Pat Brown who garnered possession at will, and Cimarosti, switching between forward and defence.
Bostons would have been happy with the output of Damon King and Larry Stimson, who both played their best games at this level, and the old-firm of Miller and Marsh, who were at their brilliant best all day.
Next week Tasmans travel to Mallee Park, and will look forward to a few players returning in this big clash, whilst Bostons will take on Marble Range at Ravendale, in a match that now carries a lot of interest for the fourth spot battle.
Feel free to bag me out, give advice, or anything else...
Tigers win thriller
Written by James Gloyn
With Tasmans boasting a who’s who of outs, a few pundits thought an upset may have been on the cards, and the outcome was one of the closest games in recent times, with the Tigers winning by just three points. One could have been forgiven for thinking it was the Masters Games, with Tasmans stalwart David Stoeckel, and Boston veteran Brett Watherston lining up for their respective sides.
In-form Tasman midfielder Pat Brown lined up on Bostons Stephen Rees early and this was a very good duel throughout the day, whilst playmaker Matt Dodd began the match loose on the half back line.
Rhys Marsh got the Tigers moving forward early, however points were the early flavour of the day, and instead of being three goals up early, the Tigers had just three behinds. Dale Gericke and Michael Tabe continued their form from the previous week, finding plenty of the ball, whilst Dodd and Scott Forrest controlled the Tasman half back line with a lot of contested ball.
The revamped Tasman defence, which at times included regular forward Brad Cimarosti, was under siege early in the second term, although goals were at a premium, with Adam Hywood snapping a classy goal under pressure; however Andrew Frick got an immediate reply, a rare highlight in his duel with Tabe.
Steven Craige, in his second game of the day, was put onto Paul Franklin, who had begun impressively, and did a fair job of shutting him down, and Tasmans Sean Emery, in his second League game of the season, did enough to show that he will be a future talent for the Roosters.
Towards the end of the second term, David Stoeckel joined the fray, going into the ruck, and turning back the clock, and not looking out of place at all.
Pat Brown began the third term with plenty of disposal, and one would have thought that he was winning the duel with Rees, despite the latter kicking a vital goal after earning a free kick. Jayden Roderick proved again he is the Tigers “Premiership quarter player,” after continuing the goal scoring after busting through the pack, and getting possessions at will. Ky Miller then kicked his first and only goal after a good passage of play involving Rees and Marsh, and it was the Tigers last score of the match.
Tasmans got an early goal through Cimarosti; his second of the day, but the tight contested play meant that this goal was the last of the day, although the impressive Emery had a difficult shot on goal late, which could have won the match for the Roosters. Late in the term Raikiwasa began to find the ball, but it was too little, too late for the Roosters, as Brett Watherston marked just before the siren, and the match finished with the ball in his hands, with the resultant after the siren kick well and truly off-line, giving the Tigers their second win of the season.
The under-manned Roosters were well served by Pat Brown who garnered possession at will, and Cimarosti, switching between forward and defence.
Bostons would have been happy with the output of Damon King and Larry Stimson, who both played their best games at this level, and the old-firm of Miller and Marsh, who were at their brilliant best all day.
Next week Tasmans travel to Mallee Park, and will look forward to a few players returning in this big clash, whilst Bostons will take on Marble Range at Ravendale, in a match that now carries a lot of interest for the fourth spot battle.